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Yoga - meditating minds and cornered thoughts
A drive through the cave and curves,
Light illumining the immersed subway,
An enlightened mind, working magic
Ensnaring moves of hands and legs.
Path set straight, to blacken the mind,
Thoughts,action and feelings at bay.
Eyes closed and smile in place,
Everything seemed to be in array.
I saw the hands stretched at her sides,
Legs folded; back held straight,
He watched her, swallowing fast,
I watched him, with eyes aghast.
4 Candles:
Good beginning!
@ Ajey i started this poem not with a light note, wanted it to be mystical, but half way through it became light and I didn't do anything about it... hence the good beginning and not so good ending :)
I should thank you for your subtle comment...
I saw the hands stretched at her sides,
Legs folded; back held straight,
He watched her, swallowing fast,
I watched him, with eyes aghast.
I actually liked the ending -:). I feel it has given it a humour touch
@devs taste differs... if you ask me i liked the beginning and the middle more than the end, but wanted to keep it light... happy that you liked the ending :)
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