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Friday, February 27, 2009

Do me a favor please kill me!




Hurtful words sliced through
twisted and turned, drawing blood
You achieved what you set to do..
But are you happy? I am not so sure...

The day dawned, bright and warm
Memories so crude and strong
prisoned inside a vacuum cell
could see you watching me struggle.

your face keep popping through
the creased mind acts like a sleuth
no corner hidden enough
you rip through vein and blood.

you sit on my head
and refuse to budge
what do i do to move ahead?
what is that I asked of you?
a little smile
a little hug
a little love
to live through....

oh! it's so dull and grey
nothing waits for the day
ignored people who waved at me
Do me a favor please kill me!
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16 comments:

  1. Absolutely SerendipitousMarch 3, 2009 at 5:34 PM

    Good one viji. As i said earlier...it flows out of you.

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  2. VijiMarch 6, 2009 at 8:47 PM

    thanks vandya :)

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  3. OpaqueMarch 12, 2009 at 2:12 AM

    A good one!!! I am probably in songwriting mode, hence an instant tune pops into my head. Pardon me for that. A nice spot you have got here!!!

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  4. VijiMarch 12, 2009 at 8:12 AM

    hey thanks Brosreview :) i'm honoured... music and poetry is my life...

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  5. VijiMarch 12, 2009 at 8:35 AM

    I went through your blog Ajey, it's breathtaking... i would really love to hear the tune for my lines. i have always heard other's sing but never once thought that my lines can be musical too....touched...

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  6. OpaqueMarch 13, 2009 at 1:37 AM

    @Viji - Oh, thank you!!! I am glad you like my spot.

    Umm, your poems can be musical as well. If I come with a tune, I shall inform you.

    And, yea, most people start following a blog and don't think about checking out the old posts. I am different. Hence, I replied to the older ones here.

    Cheers!!!

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  7. Asha SundarMarch 13, 2009 at 4:19 PM

    chanceless viji, i really liked this post....

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  8. VijiMarch 19, 2009 at 9:21 AM

    thanks asha:)

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  9. Cassiopeia RisesMarch 23, 2009 at 3:30 AM

    Excellent Viji. Your imagery is wonderful. I'm glad you stopped. Now I have found You!

    love-bd

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  10. AnonymousMarch 25, 2009 at 10:57 AM

    nice one..

    do you have a tune for this?

    when that face pops up again, just punch the nose on that face

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  11. VijiMarch 25, 2009 at 7:57 PM

    hahaha... i would just love to do that... tune? u think there's a song hidden in there? you are the second person who had asked me this...
    whenever i read this piece i read it as a poem...song? am not sure...no need to add that you are an amazing writer... i spent 4 hours reading ur blog yesterday... laughed my heart out.kudos chriz...

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  12. AnonymousMarch 25, 2009 at 9:26 PM

    thanks.. am honoured.. bows down...

    am checking your poems.. nice ones

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  13. VijiMarch 25, 2009 at 9:33 PM

    and am reading ur poems chriz :)

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  14. sudharm baxiMarch 31, 2009 at 6:52 PM

    Loved the piece, very nicely executed is what i would say..

    and i am following you, for further similar pieces in future..

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  15. Gemini By NatureApril 9, 2009 at 9:50 AM

    Very vivid =). I like your word choices

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  16. VijiApril 11, 2009 at 9:51 PM

    thank you gemini by nature :)

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