Do me a favor please kill me!
Hurtful words sliced through
twisted and turned, drawing blood
You achieved what you set to do..
But are you happy? I am not so sure...
The day dawned, bright and warm
Memories so crude and strong
prisoned inside a vacuum cell
could see you watching me struggle.
your face keep popping through
the creased mind acts like a sleuth
no corner hidden enough
you rip through vein and blood.
you sit on my head
and refuse to budge
what do i do to move ahead?
what is that I asked of you?
a little smile
a little hug
a little love
to live through....
oh! it's so dull and grey
nothing waits for the day
ignored people who waved at me
Do me a favor please kill me!
16 Candles:
Good one viji. As i said earlier...it flows out of you.
thanks vandya :)
A good one!!! I am probably in songwriting mode, hence an instant tune pops into my head. Pardon me for that. A nice spot you have got here!!!
hey thanks Brosreview :) i'm honoured... music and poetry is my life...
I went through your blog Ajey, it's breathtaking... i would really love to hear the tune for my lines. i have always heard other's sing but never once thought that my lines can be musical too....touched...
@Viji - Oh, thank you!!! I am glad you like my spot.
Umm, your poems can be musical as well. If I come with a tune, I shall inform you.
And, yea, most people start following a blog and don't think about checking out the old posts. I am different. Hence, I replied to the older ones here.
Cheers!!!
chanceless viji, i really liked this post....
thanks asha:)
Excellent Viji. Your imagery is wonderful. I'm glad you stopped. Now I have found You!
love-bd
nice one..
do you have a tune for this?
when that face pops up again, just punch the nose on that face
hahaha... i would just love to do that... tune? u think there's a song hidden in there? you are the second person who had asked me this...
whenever i read this piece i read it as a poem...song? am not sure...no need to add that you are an amazing writer... i spent 4 hours reading ur blog yesterday... laughed my heart out.kudos chriz...
thanks.. am honoured.. bows down...
am checking your poems.. nice ones
and am reading ur poems chriz :)
Loved the piece, very nicely executed is what i would say..
and i am following you, for further similar pieces in future..
Very vivid =). I like your word choices
thank you gemini by nature :)
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